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Modern Warfare1.0 – 20lt
IP: 84.230.193.74
Game Mode: Death Match
Lives: 0
Max Kills: 15
Version: OpenLieroX 0.58 rc5

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Modern Warfare1.0 – 20lt
IP: 84.251.82.159
Game Mode: Death Match
Lives: 0
Max Kills: 12
Version: OpenLieroX 0.58 rc5

Players:

[~Lard~]

hi! this is my first lvl.
i made it with ms paint and some pattern from ms word,
hope u like it,
here's the picture :
(sorry for my bad english)


Link:
http://www.mediafire.com/?zgznnyjoxmt

[IRC]

[~Lard~]

i don't have any idea for that part...
maybe u could help me?

[Michiel]

looks like that airplane going to hit that house, is it like a second 911?
but it looks nice though, and you should make the walls different

[Legend]

Not going angry level critic this time...

For your first map ever, not bad at all. Plain graphic design doesn't bother me at all.
The layout is actually quite well done, you have a tunnel that is mutual for many good LX levels.
Just add more stuff in there so playing would be a tad more diverse.
Also the black room that separates the rooms is a good thing to have. Perhaps add some destroyable platforms there?
The right side of the map is completely unnecessary, there's just a lot room for no purpose. I would simply delete it.
The aeroplane part is badly designed, but with a few changes it would turn out a whole lot better.
         * Create an engineering room, add there some scheisse and especially a windshield that should be dirt.
         * All the seats should not be solid nor dirt, increasing the gameplay.
ALL the boxes in that certain room should be dirt.
From the sauna there should be a path below -> adds a bit more dimension to the gameplay.
And what else? That cactus looks a bit lonely, design more stuff.

I did a few changes myself, didn't bother to design anything detailed since it's your level after all.
I'm not going to list all the little changes I made as you, being the levelmaker, should spot them right away and perhaps even get some ideas. Happy to be of service.

Link to the image: http://img412.imageshack.us/img412/499/simplehouse.png

[~Lard~]

thx for the critic..
i appreciate it
maybe i could do better next time..

[Asrack]

Did anyone notice that the doors in this house if were made in real life would really suck? Can you imagine having to get a ladder to open a door and then having to climb through to the other side? You would have to have different sized ladders to get from room to room. Maybe it is just me but I found it kinda funny.

Anywho, I think Legend touched on most things.  I would add;

 - Scale your stuff.
 - Don't use to much dirt because of lag issues.

I think thats all I can think of.

Good for your first map, good luck on your next.